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The Ballad of the Goblin King by ~SkyeHaerrington:iconSkyeHaerrington:



Once upon a time, not long past,
In a world of magic
There was a man, majestic man
Whose love turn’d quite tragic.

He was a man, a foolish man
Who thought not of the cost,
Because of his rigidity
His love, to him, is lost.

He found a girl, a pretty girl
And claimed her for his own,
Thought she’d desire him too
And rule on his hearts throne.

His love was pure, his eyes clouded,
The girl mistook intent
For want of villainous ruin
And left him in torment.

He was a man, a foolish man
Who thought not of the cost,
Because of his rigidity
His love, to him, is lost.

He set a trap to catch this girl,
This man, this Goblin King.
To lure her to the Underground,
Her brother he did bring.

He trick’d this girl, his mortal girl,
To wish the child away.
He took her to his Labyrinth
In hopes that she would stay.

Alas, she chose to fight him off,
His heart and maze, she won,
Back to the mortal world she took
His life and would-be son.

He was a man, a foolish man
Who thought not of the cost,
Because of his rigidity
His love, to him, is lost.
©2006-2009 ~SkyeHaerrington
:iconskyehaerrington:

Author's Comments

This Ballad is written about the Labyrinth. A friend of mine told me it was worth posting, so I shall give it a shot. Jareth, Sarah, Toby and the Labyrinth do not belong to me. I'm not sure I liked how this turned out, which is why I would lke advanced critique. Thanks for reading!

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:iconnezumi-leelai:
Wow, that's awesome! Lovely ballad that describes poor Jareth's love exactly. Hehe, you should write one for Sarah too. ^__^
:iconskyehaerrington:
Maybe, though it may not be a ballad. I tend to have more sympathy for Jareth because she refused him. :) But maybe I'll work something out. Thank you and thanks for the fav!

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:iconmaruki:
Wow, beautifully written, Sarah-san ^^ Never really saw it that way as you described it, so it's an eye-opener for me ^^
You could write one about Sarah, and maybe the aftermath, how after awhile she realized how mistaken she was?
:iconskyehaerrington:
Thanks, Maru.

Perhaps I could do that, but I'm not sure. I don't know how poetically I could really do Sarah. Realizations of being wrong are more of a prose thing for me. Actually, I want to say it happens in all of my Labyrinth prose.

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Fear me, love me, do as I say and I will be your slave.

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:icontreadsoflty:
Definitely like the was you manage to hold toghether such a tight rhythm. Helps carry it along. Stops it tripping from the tongue.

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:iconskyehaerrington:
Thank you!

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:iconmaruki:
You're welcome ^^

Ah, I see your point, there. Maybe one day when you're bored you could take a whack at a poetical version of it, or whatever you wanna do ^-~
:iconbluesatine:
Oooo....Sarah rhymed....lol
I like it, even though I've never seen the movie....

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~~Blue Satine~~
:iconskyehaerrington:
Yeah, my mentioning that I rarely rhyme is what prompted me to put this in conference. :)

Thanks for the comment!

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